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Essay Editing

Typing out your thoughts in a word processing program is only the first step in writing a good essay. EDMO's Essay Editing coaches can help kids at any grade level pore back over their writing to eliminate language mistakes, polish phrases, and correct spelling errors. In the process, kids can learn how to improve their writing on their own! In our tutoring sessions, we can go over specific essays the student has written or assign essay writing and editing exercises. Recommended materials: writing utensil and paper
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Ken Der

Ken is thrilled to have the opportunity to inspire and challenge young minds while rocking the EDMO vibe! He is currently a sapling among the trees at Stanford University who hopes to one day grow into a (tall) civil engineer and city planner. On the side, he serves as the news director at campus radio station KZSU 90.1FM. He has spent the past two summers at EDMO's Alameda site, most recently as a Pro Maker Instructor, but his dedication to working with students began early on as the founder of a local mentoring program. Ken’s passion is guiding students along their quest in discovering their inner genius by leveraging their strengths and interests. You can often catch Ken in his natural habitat on board a city bus, or on the air talking about the news and interviewing fascinating people!

Kim Gardner

Kim has been coaching and teaching a wide range of subjects for over 10 years, finding her passion when she was 17. She studied psychology for her BA at CSU Sacramento and accomplished her MA in Behavior Analysis from Capella University. She taught special needs students and their families for four years before exploring life as the art instructor KimChi! She is passionate about helping youth develop their critical thinking skills and self confidence through her teaching and tutoring.

Sydney Segal

Sydney has been with Camp EDMO for over 12 years –– as a camper for seven, then a leader-in-training, counselor, and now… an EDMO Coach! She is currently a rising sophomore at UC Berkeley, with an intended major in Media Studies and minors in Journalism and Spanish. Aside from her passions for working with children, writing, and language, Sydney is an avid traveler, volleyball player, artist, and tutor. In fact, when she’s not editing her friends’ essays or leading repeat-after-me songs at summer camp, you’ll likely find Sydney at JoAnn’s Fabrics, passing a volleyball around, or planning her next trip abroad. Though learning can surely be difficult sometimes, Sydney hopes to inspire the same enthusiasm in kids for education and trying new things that she too developed at EDMO.

Anne Lockmiller

Annie received a B.A. in Sociology from UC Berkeley, and will complete her M.A. in Guidance and Counseling from San Jose State in December 2020. Annie's goal in education is to make a connection with every student she works with. She seeks to help kids develop through compassion and exploring their interests. Annie is dedicated to promoting social justice and cultural awareness to help students develop an informed and open-minded perspective on the world. She also believes in laughter and fun in education. She has experience in working with students in STEM fields as well as Social and Emotional Learning. She has experience with academic and career counseling, and has worked with children from ages 3-18.

Julissa Martinez

Julissa Martinez is currently on her 4th year of college at the University of California Merced, majoring in Psychology and Public Health. She is bilingual; fluent in English and Spanish. The passion to create and help kids develop and grow to their best of their abilities with surrounding support and an encouraging environment is what strives her to be the best version of herself when working with kids. She has always been learning and working with kids from babysitting family members to volunteering and working with kids. Her career goals involve working with kids because she loves the experiences she's had with them; kids uplift and create a fun working environment. Education is a critical component in a kids development so when she can do something to provide help or support, she is driven to take on that opportunity to get kids striving in all that they do.

Jordie Marie Rippon

Jordie Marie Rippon is A graduate student studying Creative Producing and Management at CalArts. She has previously received a Bachelor's of Science in Technology Communication and Theater. She loves to create an environment that makes it fun to learn and loves to encourage and empower kids to think about problems differently as a tool to help solve the problem.

Mary Cron

Mary Cron specializes as an English tutor and values teaching young minds how to master the written word while also building self confidence. When Mary was a young student, she had tutors who gave her the self confidence and tools to pursue her dreams. And it is her passion to pass on the same enthusiasm to other young minds. She loves working with kids because as much as she is teaching them, they are teaching her about their world and perspectives. She has extensive experience tutoring in various levels that range from English Composition all the way up to Advanced Placement Literature. In addition, she has an Associates Degree in English Literature while currently working towards her BA at California State University Chico. Mary's passion is to teach young minds about the written word while also giving them confidence in how to express themselves.